Today Nic told us that he got a chocolate competition sheet from New World and if we got 10/10
We got a free chocolate bar. And he put music on and played his drums. Suzanne came in and distracted us. But when we had finished he told us it was just a trick. He did it for our learning self-agency to see how fast we got distracted!
Don't be naughty to Supermum. If you are she will turn you into a flat pancake.
Supermums eyes sparkle in the brightness of the sun. She has four sharp teeth so she can eat the pancakes with the bones from the people who were naughty. She can fly as her feet are jets Whoosh. The bones make her stronger.
Even though you think of her as a big bad tough mum, she's actually a nice, caring person who loves caring for people and the enviroment. I'm happy she lives here, and she's on my side.
Purpose: To describe an interesting character so we can tell a story about them at the Marae stay.
WALT: Entertain (character description)
Think of a character you could write about.
Introduce your character in an entertaining way.
Describe their looks.
Describe their personality.
I think/feel statement (Conclusion / Summary)
Criteria: I can
Descriptive vocabulary (words that help to SHOW the reader)
use a range of verbs
Language features (phrases that help paint a picture)
select one or two similes
use onomatopoeia to show sounds
select words that start with the same sound (alliteration)
My writing is 2-3 paragraphs (100 - 200 words)
Learning Partner Comment
Feedback: You said she's a nice person but at the start you said she would turn people into pancakes.
Feedforward: I like the way you used lots of similies
Overall, how well do you think your learning partner has done?